familiar mass
star shaped ice in your rootbeer
Love is a bear
grain to that prisoner
the first book
targeted relief
the goldredgoldredgold leaves crunching up under your feet
Love is a steak filling with hershey syrup
choking-on-candy-angels-candy-crack-crack-up-like-nuts-crack-up-in-the-nut-cracker
-I-am-drowning-on-too-much-I-cannot-get-back-you-can't
Godly
then how amazed we must stand when a God drowns.
This is great. You open with "love is familiar mass" - which seems very technical, very disconnected. Like you don't really think too much of love.
ReplyDeleteBut then the very next line is "love is star shaped ice in your rootbeer" - which is much more optimistic.
wow you are an amazing and unique writer. i am excited to see more of your posts. i like your "about me" section. the part where you say "i have nerves that can ouch",such a neat way of saying it.
ReplyDeleteSimply put I love it all Louis. Especially the line, "Love is a steak filling with hershey syrup."
ReplyDeleteYou are a genius my friend. I don't kno how you do it. Pure talent. I really like the "goldredgoldredgold leaves crunching up under your feet." I think that is very creative.
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